I played through it once, and enjoyed myself.
If you continue with this, the first thing I would do id find a better way to to transition the music, or use music that transitions better. The three tracks you chose all start out with silence and don’t lend themselves to being switched between quite so suddenly. I know it’s Twine, so a crossfade or fadeout before changing scenes might be hard, but the music was the one thing I noticed pulling me out of the moment.
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